2025适应性训练4-应用文-活动分享:帮助老人跨越数字鸿沟
第一项:审题分析
1.1文体格式结构→短文/英语角分享:非正式文体,无严格格式要求,但需有清晰的开头、主体和结尾。语言风格→个人叙述,情感真挚,积极向上;人称→第一人称(描述个人参与和体会);时态→过去时(描述活动过程)+现在时/现在完成时(描述体会和普遍意义)。
1.2新课标主题语境→人与社会(People and Society)→子话题:参与社会与服务社会(Participation in Society and Social Services)→细分话题:志愿服务活动(Volunteer activities),信息技术与社会生活(Information Technology and Social Life),老龄化社会问题(Issues of an Aging Society)。
第二项:布局谋篇
1.提取核心信息+隐藏信息:
● 核心信息:我是李华,参加志愿者社团的“帮助老人跨越数字鸿沟”活动,活动内容是教老人使用手机应用,我的体会是很有意义。
● 隐藏信息/拓展:数字鸿沟的背景、老人面临的具体困难、学习过程中的具体场景、老人成功的喜悦、志愿者的耐心、活动带来的更深层意义(技术的作用、社会包容)。
● 信息分解方法:背景描述法(数字鸿沟),具体内容描述法(活动环节、教学内容),具体列举+描述法(视频通话、无现金支付等应用),经验、惯例引入法(志愿者耐心指导),意义功能展望法(技术 unites, not divides)。
2.布局谋篇:
● 第一段(背景交代+过渡)→交代活动背景(数字鸿沟的影响)及活动目的(帮助老人跨越数字鸿沟)。(信息分解方法:背景描述法)
● 话题词汇:digital divide, elderly, challenging, bridge, volunteer activity
● 句式示例1→ The rapid advance of digital technology presents a significant challenge for many elderly people, leaving them potentially isolated.(使用现在完成时态和分词短语,描述背景和影响) (翻译:数字技术的快速发展对许多老年人构成了重大挑战,让他们可能被孤立。)
● 句式示例2→Aware of this issue, our volunteer club recently organized an activity aiming to help them cross this digital gap.(使用形容词作表语和动词不定式短语,引出活动目的) (翻译:意识到这个问题,我们志愿者社团最近组织了一次活动,旨在帮助他们跨越这个数字鸿沟。)
● 第二段(主体段:实质内容+拓展支撑)→详细描述活动过程:如何开展(讲座、分组)、具体教什么(应用类型)、老人和志愿者的互动(struggles, eagerness, patience, success, smile)。(信息分解方法:具体内容描述法,具体列举+描述法,经验、惯例引入法)
● 话题词汇:community center, lecture, practical skills, hands-on sessions, patiently, guided, apps, video calls, mobile payments, initial struggles, eagerness, inspiring, simple tasks, great achievements
● 句式示例1→ Held at the local community center, the event started with a simple lecture covering essential digital skills.(使用过去分词作状语,描述活动地点和开始方式) (翻译:活动在当地社区中心举行,以一个涵盖基本数字技能的简单讲座开始。)
● 句式示例2→ Following the lecture, volunteers were paired with seniors for one-on-one, hands-on learning, patiently guiding them to use everyday apps like making video calls or checking bus schedules.(使用现在分词作状语,描述活动后续环节和教学内容) (翻译:讲座结束后,志愿者与老年人进行了一对一的实践学习,耐心指导他们使用日常应用,比如打视频电话或查询公交时刻表。)
● 句式示例3→ Though initially hesitant, their eagerness and perseverance in mastering these new tools were truly inspiring, turning even simple tasks into moments of great achievement.(使用让步状语从句和动词短语,描述老人学习过程和志愿者的感受) (翻译:虽然最初犹豫不决,但他们在掌握这些新工具时的热情和毅力确实令人鼓舞,即使是简单的任务也变成了巨大的成就时刻。)
● 第三段(结语段)→总结活动意义和个人体会,升华主题(技术应连接而非隔离)。(信息分解方法:意义功能展望法,反思)
● 话题词汇:meaningful, valuable, bridging the gap, technology, connects, isolates, shared mission
● 句式示例1→ Witnessing their joy upon successful use was incredibly rewarding, reinforcing the value of such efforts.(使用现在分词作主语和动词短语,描述个人感受和活动价值) (翻译:看到他们成功使用后的喜悦是令人难以置信的,这强化了这类努力的价值。)
● 句式示例2→ This experience deeply reminded me that bridging the digital divide is a shared mission, ensuring technology connects everyone, especially our elderly.(使用动词remind和分词短语,总结体会并升华主题) (翻译:这次经历深刻地提醒我,弥合数字鸿沟是一项共同的使命,确保技术连接每个人,特别是我们的老年人。)
第三项:习作满分升级
In a world increasingly shaped by digital technology, many elderly people often find themselves left behind. Recognizing this challenge, our volunteer club organized a special event last week at the community center, dedicated to helping them bridge this digital divide. (背景交代+引出活动,使用分词短语作定语和状语,词汇升级)
The activity began with a concise lecture imparting essential digital skills. Following this, volunteers were paired with seniors for one-on-one, hands-on guidance. We patiently instructed them on using practical apps like making video calls, handling mobile payments, and accessing online services. Despite their initial struggles, their eagerness to learn was truly inspiring, and every joyful "I finally did it!" smile underscored the immediate impact of our efforts. (活动内容详情,使用分词短语作状语,列举具体应用,描述互动和感受,词汇和结构升级)
This experience was incredibly rewarding, powerfully reminding me that bridging this gap is a shared mission to ensure technology unites, rather than divides, our society. (总结体会和升华主题,使用动名词作主语,强调句式,连接词替换)
(119 words | 蓝思值: 990L | CEFR: B2- | 话题词汇密度: ~48% | 评分: 15/15)